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I'm sailing on a sea of red, kissing black holes and having conversations with coffee cups. Jotting notes with erasers on napkins and killing idealism with blanks. Lovers like us die slowly, drowning in committment. Stubble above a quivering lip lashing across the table aiming for a heart. But what is "dead" anyway? I'm being smothered by a self-replicating system, voice activated. Black nail polish caressing rotten teeth I'll grind this perfume bottle into your throat and leave you choking on pheromones. Kiss the heroin off my lips, lover. I need you like an amputation.
©2006-2009 ~BetweenTheEchoes
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Shiiit

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Given 2007-07-09

Using a powerful pace and voice, Love Letter by ~BetweenTheEchoes creates a sadistic atmosphere in one short prose-like poem. (Suggested by ~Amalgamadora and Featured by `PoeticWar)

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:iconshufy:
Wow. Nice. I like how it's almost a free flow of thought, but really controlled. Also, do you mind if I borrow the line "Conversations with coffee cups"?. I've written something along those lines, but that just EXACTLY what I wanted to say.
:iconbluelightreflections:
Love this, really refreshing. The amputation line is a great one to end on, and i also love the coffee cups.

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~eating all the kisses off the mistletoe~
:icontsuki-panda:
wow now thats one hell of a poem :clap:
shame :P you should leave more detail in the author's comment

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Divide 30 by 1/2 then add 10. The answer is >.> u'd be surprised most people get it wrong.
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:iconsukkigoh:
:faint:i m fain'

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i m スッキゴh。
:iconsukkigoh:
jus kiddin' :glomp:

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i m スッキゴh。
:iconashenden:
I like the way it's just flowing. It's very visual...nicely done!

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:iconmissy7:
Very nice.

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"Hide not your talents. For use they were made. What's a sundial in the shade?" -Benjamin Franklin
:iconjan1234:
really agressive. nice
:icontristan6:
i don't think i 'get' this poem that well but, hey, that's ok. i must say, you are so quoteable! i love the part about kissing black holes, being smothered by self-replicating and the part about amputation. this is really different than anything i've ever read both on dA and otherwise. i like how you broke up the lines and how well everything flows. congrats on a well deserved dd!

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